一、篇章结构
(一)先有规矩,然后才能从心所欲,不逾矩
议论文的写作,住往从正反两方面来论述,且都有其约定俗成的议论模式,即从“主题句一正面论述,反面论述一结论”四大块去营造文章的基本结构(四块论)。例如,某题目要求论述“学校规定‘课间学生只能呆在自己的教室里'对吗?”这一话题。如果作者认为学校的规定不对,他就应该在文章第一块(段)亮出自己的观点:There? is? currently? much? discussion? about? whether? students? should? stay? in? their? own? classrooms? or? not? during? break? times.Personally? I? believe? that—.而第二块应该从正面论述“课间不能只呆在自己的教室里”的理由。比如可以说:I? would? argue? that? break? times? are? our? only? opportunity? to? choose? what? we? want? to? do.? 第三块则从反面观点,即“课间只能呆在自己的教室里”出发,批驳对方观点或进一步阐述己方观点。例如可以说:Another? reason? why? people? say? that? students? have? to? stay? in? their? own? classes? at? break? times? is? that? it? would? be? difficult? to? organize? dinners。最后一块(段)则用不同的语言再次强调已方观点。乍一看去,议论文“四块论”仿佛有“八股文”的嫌疑,但“四块论”符合人的认知规律,所以值得多多模仿和操练。
(二)围绕中心论述,确保论述的内容直接为主题服务
在上例中,“学生课间时不能只呆在自己的教室里”是主题句,论述时应该紧紧围绕它。有的同学在写的时候先说“学生若课间被允许到其他班级活动,就可以交到更多的朋友”,然后又说“交到更多朋友就可以学到更多知识”,“学到更多知识就可以为社会做出更大的贡献”……这种论述方式貌似环环相扣,承前启后,实则是中心涣散的流水账,说到最后,不仅读者会一头雾水,连作者自己都会忘了自己在说什么。
(三)确立并写好论点,并将其置于每一段的段首
整篇文章有整篇文章的中心论点,每一段落有每一段落的分论点。选取论点时要问一问自己:这一论点是否会让自己信服?如果—个论点连自己都说服不了,就要放弃它。段落论点的呈现不能羞羞答答,犹报琵琶半遮面,也不能深藏不露,让读者去总结和归纳,而必须在文章开篇或段落开头就亮出来。论点置于篇首或段首,才能纲举目张,也是确保不跑题的前提。以下两个例子中,第一个结构松散,群龙无首,令读者不知所云;而第二个例子则中心突出,章法严谨。请看:
1.Firstly,it? is? very? convenient? in? daily? life.There? are? many? shops? and? supermarkets? in? a? city.I? can? buy? everything? I? need? easily? in? these? places.When? I? am? sick,I? can? easily? see? a? doctor? in? any? clinic? or? hospital.Transport? services? are? good? in? a? city.when? I? want? to? go? somewhere,I? can? take? a? bus,a? train? or? something? else.There? are? also? many? kinds? of? entertainment? in? a? city.Public? buildings(such? as? libraries)and? parks? can? easity? be? found? in? a? city,too.
2.First.it? is? convenient? and? comfortable? to? live? in? a? city.To? begin? with,there? is? good? housing? in? a? city,as? all? the? houses? and? flats? are? well-equipped? with? good? facilities? and? surrounded? by? modern? amenities? such? as? places? of? entertainment,public? libraries? and? parks.
而中心句的写法也有讲究。中心句必须能高度概括所在段落的论据,它的关键词应该在每—个论据中都有重复或适当体现。那种无关痛痒的叙述或说明性的句子,是不适宜用作中心句的。例如:
1.Students? always? feel? relaxed? and? happy? during? breaks.(叙述性句子)
2.Break? times? are? scheduled? for? about? 10? minutes.(说明性句子)
以下即是论述“学校规定‘课间学生只能呆在自己的班级里'对吗?”的一篇学生习作:
Although? some? people? believe? that? students? should? stay? in? their? own? classrooms? during? break? times,I? would? like? to? argue? that? we? should? be? allowed? to? spend? break? times? in? another? class.
The? most? important? reason? for? believing? that? is? that? many? students? have? friends? in? other? classes.We? spend? all? day? in? our? own? classroom,and? break? times? are? the? only? time? we? have? to? spend? with? other? friends.It? can? become? very? tedious(令人厌倦的)to? have? to? spend? even? more? time? with? the? same? people.
A? further? reason? for? allowing? student? to? choose? where? they? spend? their? break? times? is? that? it? would? stop? arguements.If? students? are? forced? to? spend? time? with? classmates? who? are? not? good? friends,they? can? annoy? each? other.This? leads? to? problems? that? have? to? be? sorted? out? by? teachers.
Teachers? argue? that? we? all? should? stay? in? our? own? classes,because? it? is? then? easier? to? know? what? is? going? on.They? say? that? it? is? difficult? to? keep? track? of? students? when? they? are? walking? round? the? corridors.However,students? could? be? given? the? chance? to? choose? a? different? classroom? to? spend? the? whole? break? time? in.That? would? mean? that? there? would? not? be? any? students? in? the? corridors.
As? I? have? explained,although? it? might? be? a? little? easier? to? manage? when? everyone? stays? in? their? own? classroom,it? would? make? break? times? happier? for? all? students? if? they? were? allowed? to? choose? where? they? spent? their? time.
这篇范文符合“四块论”的基本模式,正反论述兼顾,结构严谨,中心突出。
二、句子修辞
(一)应用修辞,增强说服力
适当采用比喻、头韵(即连续数个单词的头音或头字母相同)、夸张等修辞手法,采用幽默、平行结构等写作手法,可以把道理说得更加透彻,把观点表达得更加鲜明,把平淡的内容表现得更加生动,从而更好地传递信息,增添文采,激发读者的共鸣。例如:
1.Many? people? have? tried? a? thousand? times? before? they? achieve? their? goals.(夸张) ?
2.Only? a? madman? would? choose? to? live? in? a? modern? city.(夸张)
3.Our? life? would? be? like? soup? without? salt? or? flowers? without? sunlight.(比喻)
4.The? best? way? is? to? reduce,reuse? and? recycle.(头韵)
5.For? children.the? Internet? is? another? way? to? waste? more? hours.(幽默)
6.If? you? want? to? earn? a? satisfactory? grade? in? the? training? program,you? must? arrive? punctually,you? must? behave? courteously,and? you? must? study? conscientiously.(平行结构)
值得注意的是,比喻等修辞格的使用及谚语等的引用关乎作者对英语文化的理解,因为它们在英语中的意义往往与我们的理解大相径庭,很容易误用。只有多多学习,认真分析它们的应用环境,使用起来才能锦上添花。如果没有十分的把握,切不可生搬硬套,否则会适得其反。
(二)表达到位,才能言之成理
通常,作者对自己论述的观点是清楚的,但在将观点传达给读者时,往往因为用词不准确,逻辑欠严密,或因受中国式思维的干扰而令表达不到位,结果使读者如堕五里雾中。作者应站在读者的立场上考虑问题,始终牢记“读者明不明白”才是判断写作是否成功的最重要标准。请看以下几个表达不到位的例句及其改正方法。
1.They? gave? me? what? I? need,but? not? what? I? want.
析:want可译为“想要”。从汉语角度看,整个句子是流畅的,但从英语的逻辑上看,want与need的意义极易混淆,因此整个句子意义表达不到位,含糊不清。可以改为:They? have? given? me? what? I? need? but? not? What? I? often? ask? for.
2.Maybe? there? are? also? some? disadvantages? of? living? in? a? city,but? I? think? they? are? less? important.I? feel? convenient? and? comfortable.
析:句子后半部分的逻辑关系未交代清楚,令人有“前言不搭后语“的感觉。可以改为:Theere? are? surely? disadvantages? of? living? in? a? city,too,but? they? are? less? important? and? tend? to? be? de-emphasized.For? the? sake? of? the? advantages? mentioned? above,I? prefer? to? live? in? a? city.
3.Different? people? have? different? choices.Some? people? like? living? in? a? city? and? some? people? like? living? in? a? village.
析:Choice的含义十分宽泛,因此与后面的like不相称,应改为:Different? people? have? different? likes? and? dislikes.Some? like? to? live? in? a? city,others? like? to? live? in? a? village.
4.The? people,the? society? and? so? on? were? quite? different? from? now.
析:The? people,the? society依然不足以让读者完全理解要论述的话题,可改为:The? peopIe,the? society? and? other? aspects? of? life? were? quite? different? from? now.
5.Thieves? should? be? sentenced? for? what? they? have? done. ?
析:使用sentence未免言过其实,应改为:Thieves? should? be? punished? for? their? wrongdoing.
(三)简洁洗练,要言不烦
语言简洁有力,文风干净利落,是议论文的重要特征之一。应该指出的是,好句子并不以长短论英雄,长句未必不简洁,短句未必不哆咳。作者在写作时,只要力求做到“章无冗段,段无冗句,句无冗词”,就可改变当断不断、拖泥带水的现象。
1.The? Are? No? Good? Reasons? Why? Boys? and? Girls? Should? Not? Be? Treated? Equally.
析:此为一标题句,此作者滥用双重否定,从而使句子过长。宜改为:Boys? and? Girls? Should? Be? Given? Equal? Treatment.
2.For? instance,I? knew? how? to? communicate? with? other? people? and? how? to? look? after? myself.The? most? important? thing? was? that? I? learn? to? be? independent.
析:从意义上讲,look? after? myself与independent关系紧密,可以合在一起。句子可改为:For? instance,I? knew? how? to? communicate? with? others? and? how? to? look? after? myself? as? an? independent? girl.
3.Moreover,as? some? girls? study? harder? than? boys,they? may? be? even? superior.
析:moreover后若继续用从句,就会干扰读者的思维。可改为:Moreover,some? girls? are? very? dilgent.As? a? result,they? may? prove? superior? to? ordinary? boys.
4.What? I? mean? to? say? is? that? well-intentioned? law-makers? sometimes? make? fools? of? themselves.
析:what从句并未提供新信息,故可删去。句子可改为:Well-intentioned? law—makers? sometimes? make? fools? of? themselves.
三、词汇运用
(一)多用书面语,少用口头语
相对口头语而言,书面语更能增添文章的厚重感和读者对文章的信任感。下列每一组句子中,第二句都使用了书面语言,用词更加规范,因而比前一个句子略胜—筹。
1.We? still? have? the? social? problems.
The? same? social? problems? still? exist? today.
2.For? me,there? is? no? need? for? further? protection? of? woodlands.
As? far? as? I'm? concerned,further? protection? of? woodlands? is? not? needed.
3.With? the? development? of? computer? technology,? commercial? information? exchange? is? becoming? easier.
Computers? have? greatly? influenced? business? communication.
4.Everything? has? two? sides? and? this? problem? is? quite? the? same.
Everything? has? two? sides? and? this? issue? is? not? an? exception.
(二)使用连接词
在句子间使用连接词,能使文章脉络更加清晰,逻辑关系更加流畅。例如:
1.The? water? was? polluted.As? a? result,the? fish? died.
2.However,others? think? we? should? have? junk? food.
3.On? the? other? hand? packaging? can? have? many? disadvantages.
4.Firstly? many? people? die? of? passive? smoking(被动吸烟)and? secondly? it? can? aggravate(使……恶化)lung? diseases.
相关的连接词还有:On? the? contrary,all? in? all,in? short,generally,worse? still,on? the? other? hand,in? conclusion,as? a? consequence,hence,also,personally,furthermore,definitely,surely,undoubtedly,obviously,additionally,in? addition,moreover,consequently,clearly,besides,as? well,likewise,in? my? opinion,for? the? sake? of,last? but? not? the? least,to? begin? with,firstly(first),etc.
很多时候,一些常用的句式或句子也能承上启下,使相关的信息得到巧妙的过渡和衔接。例如:
The? main? reason? is? that…
I? can't? agree? more.
Another? thing? we? can't? forget? is? that…
There? is? every? reason? to? believe? that…
As? we? all? know…
总而言之,一篇好的议论文,总是在结构、逻辑和语言等方面略胜一筹。
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